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Author:  habilon [ Sun May 17, 2009 8:57 pm ]
Post subject:  Sakara the escaped morrel slave
Photo:http://habilonion.deviantart.com/art/saky-ready-to-pounce-166908979?q=&qo=


Name: sakara sonto
Nickname: Saky (sa-key)
Type: Morrel
Type discription:morrel are best described as looking like a cat girl
size: a bit larger than human
ears: tall and errect
tail: five feet long, bushing out at the end like a fox
eyes: copletely yellow
fur: thick and short, usualy coloured in red orange and yellow in diffrent patterns
special notes:
the morrel are/have
-telepathic (they use telepathic abilities to speak since they lack a voice box)
-to feed off the energy of the energy that subconsiously flows off all living things (this does no harm to the one that is emmiting the energy since the energy is 'extra')
-saliva that is a powerful lust drug (used in matting)
-fur that repels water, allowing them to remain dry at all times
-bones made of a organic crystal formed when morrel eat jems from their surrounding (the acid in a morrel stomach is specificaly designed to dissolve crystal and pass it into the blood stream to be added to the bone structure till a morrel is fully grown, at wich point any new crystal added goes to lengthening the tail)
- have a cluster of muscles around the vaginal canal that create a tight passage way making female morrels feel like virgins every time they are entered

Place of Birth: a distant planet

Gender: Female

Age: around 21 human years old

Height: 7'6"

Weight: 140kg

Bust: 35C

Pubic Hair: yes

Eye Color: pure glowing yellow

Skin Color: pale

Skin Texture: normal human

Hair
human:
fiery red
on head, down to shoulders
allover body, she is covered my a short thick layer of fur which is a ripple of red, orange, and yellow, the red covers her back, the orange covers her sides, and the yellow covers her belly


Body Build: semi muscular, but not completely noticable

Tail: 9 feet long

Fighting Style: Sakara hardly fights, as she is shaken by her years of slavery, she tends to try to run rather than fight

Weapons: her claws

Motivation: survival

Personality: Saky is a very curious morrel, she is always poking her nose into things, sometimes burning her nose in the prosses, if you are to describe her with two words, use "curious" and "playful"

Sexual Oddities: she finds sex to be more fun if she gives her partner a challenge, usualy it means the partner has to catch her and forcebly have sex

Clothing: none

Special Attributes: her lust drug (which she only uses if she is having sex on her own terms), water reppeling fur, and she can only speak telepathicaly

Distinguishing features: the tail and ears, along with the colour of her fur

Weaknesses: deep water, she cannot swim

Likes:
yarn
boxes
being curious
friendly people
heat
fire

Dislikes:
unfriendly people
deep water
cages
bindings

History:
Saky was taken from her home world as a pup. she grew up as a slave to a slave trader who sold her to a perverted man when she was the human equivalent of 19. she managed (out of fear for her life) to kill the man in his sleep, and ran away, she is now hunted by bounty hunters and mercs working for the man's son who wants her back so he can have some revenge
Author:  Madison [ Mon May 18, 2009 12:16 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
*Has a SERIOUSLY confused look on my face*

...I can't even make heads or tails of this...it's all over the place.
Author:  habilon [ Mon May 18, 2009 4:45 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
I used a structure from another SFA and changed it a bit, I put as much detail in as I could, and I am going to add a picture soon when I scan it
Author:  habilon [ Mon May 18, 2009 7:56 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
I have edited it a bit, and have a picture that I am going to scan soon
Author:  Madison [ Tue May 19, 2009 5:36 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
Now that I can actually read it...

-telepathic
-to feed off the energy of others
-a mouth that is not used to eat or breath but it produces a natural lust drug in the form of saliva
-fur that repels water, allowing them to walk on water, and remain dry at all times
-light bones that are as strong as diamonds

...Ok...I have some issues with the "Walking on water" and the bones....So far, the only things that can walk on water that I know of are teeny bugs that weigh less then a gram. And bone strength...well...they can be strong, but like diamonds? I have a bit of an issue with that.


EDIT: And you know...reading more...This character seems more like a monster then anything.
Author:  Dawn Portman [ Tue May 19, 2009 5:54 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
and also, natural silva in from of a lust drug is just very VERY nasty. feeding off the energy of others make no sense either. you need to edit this character heavily, so far from what I have seen, it's more monster then anything else.
Author:  habilon [ Tue May 19, 2009 2:00 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
Madison wrote:
Now that I can actually read it...

-telepathic
-to feed off the energy of others
-a mouth that is not used to eat or breath but it produces a natural lust drug in the form of saliva
-fur that repels water, allowing them to walk on water, and remain dry at all times
-light bones that are as strong as diamonds

...Ok...I have some issues with the "Walking on water" and the bones....So far, the only things that can walk on water that I know of are teeny bugs that weigh less then a gram. And bone strength...well...they can be strong, but like diamonds? I have a bit of an issue with that.



EDIT: And you know...reading more...This character seems more like a monster then anything.

so you have a problem with able to walk on water and bone strength?
if you are looking for realistic traights then I cannot see how a sight that feeds of tentacle monsters can survive if they all need to make such logical sense... and technicaly an alien is a monster that is from off earth so all aliens are monsters, so Sexy Female Aliens can be seen as Sexy Female Monsters as well.

and as for the bones and water walking

just because all we know can walk on water are little bugs, doesn't mean that somewhere else in the universe is a larger creature with similar effects, plus it is why I said the creatures bone structure is light

the bones are as hard as diamond, but that does not make them unbreakable, if you take a diamond rod that is thin and long you can snap it in half with little effort, watch indiana jones and the crystal skulls and you will see that they have the idea that aliens can have a crystal based bone structure, so as far as human thought goes it is not that far of reach.

the discription of the morrel is what it is, the fact is that it can turn into a human for, which is a traight that many users have used and for a site like this makes sense, so it can classify as a SFA,

if you want me too I will change a few things, but as I see it you are just trying to find ways to get this post deleted or changed to how you like it if it has broken the rules somehow then I will change it, but again, as I see it there are no actual problems
Author:  habilon [ Tue May 19, 2009 2:04 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
Dawn Portman wrote:
and also, natural silva in from of a lust drug is just very VERY nasty. feeding off the energy of others make no sense either. you need to edit this character heavily, so far from what I have seen, it's more monster then anything else.

how is it very nasty?
I have seen plenty of aliens and monsters that use aphrodisiacs, and feed of the energy of others

and yet again i will make this a bit more clear, monsters and aliens are one and the same, aliens are from of this planet, and monsters are from this planet
Author:  The NightBringer [ Tue May 19, 2009 3:06 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
Let me just say I'm not a mod but I'm going to toss my two, well maybe my one cent into this.

Yes, Aliens and Monsters are basically the same thing and yes Sexy Female Aliens could also be considered Sexy Female Monsters but SFA's aren't truly monsters as far as RPing is considered. They are typically victims (maybe pirates in the Vanejin IV board or whatever) but none the less they may have special abilities and even might be able to give a monsters a pretty decent run for his money...maybe even chase him/her/it away temporiarily but at the end like the agents of A.D.D they lose.

I think the problem is the character fits to much into the other category and not enough into the role an SFA was intended for. (To much the hunter, not enough the hunted) The lust drug and draining energy I would say are probably were the main problem is. I don't know about the drug being nasty as anything can taste like anything but anyway.

Of course if that was your goal and this character was meant to be a hunter...then I'd say it needs to lose a bit more human qualities and be shifted to the new monsters board.

Again, not a mod and just trying to help.
Author:  Madison [ Tue May 19, 2009 6:08 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
Thing is...there's a little matter of physics involved here. She can't walk on water because her weight will break though the surface tension of the water.

Also, I note that you listed your characters weight at 54 kilograms at the lightest, and after a bit of math so that they're in the same type of measure (You were stating one in Metric and the other in Imperial), we end up with 119 pounds. That's one weighty thing there. And in human form, that's 154.3 pounds. There's no possable way something that heavy can walk on water, as it's weight will break the surface tension of the water.
Author:  habilon [ Tue May 19, 2009 6:17 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
Madison wrote:
Thing is...there's a little matter of physics involved here. She can't walk on water because her weight will break though the surface tension of the water.

Also, I note that you listed your characters weight at 54 kilograms at the lightest, and after a bit of math so that they're in the same type of measure (You were stating one in Metric and the other in Imperial), we end up with 119 pounds. That's one weighty thing there. And in human form, that's 154.3 pounds. There's no possable way something that heavy can walk on water, as it's weight will break the surface tension of the water.

talking physics on a sight that suports tentacle monsters... sorry that seems odd, but I will change it for the soul reason that I like this site, the morrel will no longer walk on water (the morrel is a creature I made for a fantasy book of mine and RPs, so physics was not a huge thing I cared about)

PS: the discription is just saying what her spiecies is, she is going to be in human form at all times during RPs. that means she looks human, but with a tail and ears which should be perfectly fine

Iam sorry by the way if my last few posts sounded angry/anoyed, I had just woken up at the time and was not at my best

as for night bringer I am trying to portray her a hunted, but I added the draining energy (which is not harmful, as they only drain small amounts from everything around them, so no living organism is actualy hurt, I will make that more clear in my edit) and the lust drug because those are part of her spieces
Author:  habilon [ Tue May 19, 2009 6:31 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
ok I have edited Sakara now, if their are any more problems please tell me, but if you do, please bear in mind that I take things badly :x :(
Author:  The Count Alucard [ Wed May 20, 2009 6:23 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
...truth be told?

It has promise. :)

Not entirely sure what all the fuss is about... The energy drain thing? In-character reason to not worry about food. Hard bones? A little unnecessary, but nonetheless gives us more excuse to be rough with her. ;) Aphrodisiac saliva? Makes interactions with others even more fun, especially if it's not intentional on her part... :D In fact, it might even serve to attract monsters, although she may not realize it...

Admittedly, there's little reason to have an alternate form that she never uses, if the only point to it is that it's there and she never uses it... still, chances are that if she's on the weak side compared to a monster, looks more or less like a humanoid woman, and doesn't actively go around trying to rape nubile young women, that probably puts you safely in SFA territory... just my two cents.
Author:  habilon [ Wed May 20, 2009 1:21 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
thank you count for that I feel better now^^, the alt form is there in the bio souly for the fact that it is part of the actual character I made for my novel I am writing, I just feel wrong not putting it there^^
Author:  Stormbringer [ Wed May 20, 2009 2:42 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sakara the escaped morrel slave
Sounds rather like a character built by a committee. I'm not seeing how the two sides integrate at all.
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