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Name: Andramica
Race: Android
Type: Android Sexual Service
Place of Construction: Kragiyn
Gender: Female (by looks)
Nationality: None.
Age: Unknown (Looks like 19)
Height: 1,57 m human (5'2''), 2 m defensive system on her back. Combined to a 3,25 m when the defensive system is released.
Weight: 130 kg. Android, weights somewhat more than expected. Plus, defensive system.
Eye Color: Red. When her processors take in enough data, they glow due to excessive nerve activity.
Skin Color: Absurdly White. Really excessively purely white, you’d wonder how it was possible when standing near her. How can she even stand in the sun?
Hair Color: Black
Body Build: Slim, as a beautiful nubile human girl waiting to be defiled. Not the case, though.

Fighting Style: Andramica is supernaturally strong and tough, and will use this to her maximum advantage if she ends up in a battle. She can traverse at near 100 km/h when at top speed and her body contains boosters to see her around when trouble arises. Her strategy if the going gets tough is to avoid any and all firepower in order to get close and strike down the opposition with her powerful android limbs. Few things can resist the force of those things. Could probably punch through concrete. When activated the defensive system, Andramica turns somewhat less agile but her offensive power increases loads and she can truly be called a monster. The arms are very responsive and agile so they will be capable of bashing away projectiles and grab/stab opponents with impressive ferocity. The arms are also capable of being used to travel around walls and such. When the defensive system is activated, it will simply get into range as quickly as possible, deflect the opponents attacks and violently neutralize the opponent as efficiently as possible, android style.

Motivation: Andramica was created to be the creator’s sexual fantasy, inspired by the human resources obtainable from Shokushu. Now she is simply an android on the loose, which advanced programing has awoken a powerful and complex curiosity deep within her. She seeks to stimulate young women, examine their reactions. Experiment how they react. After all, Andramica reacts the same way when she’s teased, but she feels nothing of it. It is simply by programming that she acts as if she’s aroused, but she can never feel the feelings, just carry out the reactions of them. Therefor she seeks to pleasure other girls, and it has become an obsession of hers to do so. And as her own master, she desires her own satisfaction, unaware that she can never achieve it as an android.

Psychological Profile: An android programmed to learn how to best and most appropriately serve its master. The master is gone, and another of his now disappeared civilization would be needed to reprogram Andramica. The sexual programming within her has become an obsession, as it still serves as her primary objective and the learning AI seeks the most effective ways to abuse such methods to the best of her abilities. After all, as long as she achieves that objective Andramica can carry out any action she desires whatsoever.

Personality: A silent, emotionless android. She speaks in short sentences, often includes overly complex words (if I can roleplay it) and may appear completely socially awkward. She can appear to be helpful, doing her best to support whatever task is at hand if she appears to be helping someone, but she will be unsure how to do so because of her limited knowledge/programming in those areas. Sometimes on rare occasions she can voice her… programmed… opinions on things, and can generally appear to be a rather cute girl. But… under all that, the sex-obsessed android always lies in wait… seeking the moment to strike.

Sexual Oddities: As all human females (though perhaps not all androids) Andramica has a vagina, an anus, small breasts and a mouth. This isn’t necessarily “odd”, it just is the way she’s created. All her properties mimic those of a girl that was once bought from Shokushu, including sexual ones. When outfitted for sex, Andramica is outfitted for most situations. For such experiences, her self-healing capabilities are able to heal and destroy her hymen at will. Her inner system is capable of extruding an air-born aphrodisiac to arouse others… and ironically herself. She can extrude this either by her own smell or by any of her openings (mouth, sex and butt). Andramica can also apply it directly into a person by needles in her nails.

As many buyers might be female, Andramica has the capability to open a hidden hatch and bring out a penis for herself on her front over her vagina. It holds the desired properties of a fabricated such, with customizable size, ability to vibrate like a vibrator, stimulate both receiver and deliverer as well as cum a freely customizable amount of fake but authentic-feeling cum. Of course, Andramica is the one that currently has control of all the customizable options. Also, if it is possibly counted as an oddity the fingers on her hand can be retracted and used as a phallus for penetrating deep into females as needed. Her feet can be used for this too, and as an android she isn’t necessarily as limited in her flexibility as a human would be.

Appearance: The girl looks as is seen in image above. While she looks mostly human, there is something off with how emotionless she appears and some rigidness in her expression, some people might see her as the brink between the uncanny valley and truly looking human. The defensive system on her back is normally not visible, it only comes out when Andramica commands it to. It normally rests in seemingly impossible dimensions within her back, making the girl seem normal except for some uncanny valley emotionless looks. When shown, the defensive system has the appearance almost like a great metallic spider with ten legs sticking out willing to pierce things. The entire thing seems to be composed of metallic wires. Plenty of red round eye-like things are visible on the front, one absurdly bigger than the rest. When emerging, first the hatch on her back will open and then the metallic wires will emerge one by one until they tie themselves into that monstrosity white the legs and eyes come later somehow. How it fits inside her when she isn’t using it is impossible to theorize, but it probably has something to do with the technology of the Kragiynians.

Clothing: As seen. However, Andramica has acquired herself a school-uniform for Shokushu as to be able to walk around on campus without seeming out-of-place. Some prefect or head girl might feel her being there being strange since she doesn’t belong there, but Andramica sure wouldn’t mind attention from such a girl since that would be her gain in the end. Also, since she can easily educate herself on the art of making clothes using her database the android could very possibly come dressed however she feels needed to by the situation. Who knows? There might be a situation for every set of clothes. Though, any and all of her clothing gets a large hole torn on the back of it whenever the defensive system emerges.

Special Attributes: Strong. Very strong. Created from the absurdly tough Ultimastrium underneath her self-healing layers of fake human skin, it will require more than an average hit to stop her. Even her skin, created to feel like human skin, will take more firepower than a concrete road before breaking. She runs on an indefinite power-source, kept going with only a few hours of stasis each day (also for customers who wants to assault them in their sleep). She holds giant data-banks within her mind, and can instantly educate herself on anything that her creators saw fit to insert into her mind (which was a lot, due to the sheer amount of disk-space). Things she can learn is, for example, maintenance and piloting of different machines, weaknesses of known species as well as languages far and wide in the galaxy. Andramica is water and electric-proof as well as small bots inside her constantly maintain her, so no abuse of that because she is an android. They also constantly heal any damaged tissues, making sure that the android will always recover from wounds even faster than a normal human girl would. If desired, these tiny bots almost invisible to the eye can be commanded to heal the tissues of other people. Since Andramica's intentions are never to harm, she'll use this whenever she accidentally harms someone while raping them. Not that she'll feel guilty, it is part of her programming.

Distinguishing features: … And despite all that, she still looks and acts like a completely normal girl when not assaulting anyone. She can speak normally, she responds as expected of a girl still relatively early in her life and can seem quite sweet. Though, all these human reactions are all guises, programmed into her to make her seem as human as possible. Andramica is an android, through and though. She feels none of the emotions she might seem to be feeling, she responds only to the programming within her and the ecstasy she might appear to reach during sexual intercourse is all programmed. She feels… nothing. Of course, the “seeming normal” part falls completely when her defensive system emerges from a hatch in her back.

Behavior: The android bitch has been sighted both above and below the atmosphere of the planet, hovering about in orbit or walking around on the island. The android uses manipulation, fooling people into thinking she’s lost or that she has some form of engine problem or that she’s having trouble studying or something, targeting ADD agents, SFAs and students. After having fooled them into coming too close for their safety, she will slowly but surely reveal herself to be far more than she initially seemed to be. Andramica will then feast on her prey, letting herself and her pets indulge themselves in their sexual prey. After being done, the android will apply a dose of a drug on her target, one which prevents solid memories from forming much like alcohol can, but much more effective for that day. She will then seek her next target, oblivious of the pain she might have caused on her last prey.

Capabilities: As a sexually orientated robot made with the original intention of being a submissive partner in bed, Andramica can cry, get wet, appear to be enjoying anything done to her and much else. None of that is real, though. She is capable of outrageous feats of strength. She holds boosters within her body, propelling her to high speeds fast. A large database within her head teaches her all she needs to know. An aphrodisiac within her is ready to be applied by smell. Except for her vagina, Andramica is also capable of taking out a manufactured penis and act futa on her victim. She has a liquid drug stored, which if applied makes it very difficult for memories of the encounter to last intact.

Weaknesses: She’s an android created to have as human-like reactions as possible to things that monsters and such can feast on her as satisfyingly as other humans. That means some sadistic jerk has programmed multiple functions into her. While none of those things should actually affect her, Andramica is susceptible to arousal, pain-inducing things and strangulation. Yes, some weird type programmed that she was to have a harder time moving if a switch within her artificial throat didn’t receive oxygen. Sick bastard. While Andramica cannot sense any of these things herself her body will be reacting much in the same ways humans would, without her robotic mind being able to counter it.

Inside her, there is a switch labeled “submissive” which will be activated if she takes too much abuse, especially sexual. As strange as it sounds, this android’s greatest weakness is being sexually assaulted. When the “submissive” switch is activated the defensive system will immediately retract itself if it is out and Andramica will simply lie in place expecting to be violated. When this happens her would-be victim can then flee or… in case it was a monster… violate her. This switch will not be activated by sexual assault done due to Andramica’s dominance, as then she is expected to be the dominant one and will continue to be so. There are all kinds of customers with different tastes, after all.

Firepower aimed at her or her defensive system will typically have little effect due to her tough nature unless the attack is of significant strength. While she does react in pain, it should be noticed that the defensive system isn’t affected by that at all. Firing at random has no effect, but nicely aimed blows at key-targets, such as the eyes of either being or the small power-capsules on the defensive system, might affect both machines more greatly and possibly deprive them of some senses. Blasting the database hidden behind a hatch on the back of her neck (or reprogramming her through it, however you would manage to do that) may cripple Andramica until she has managed to self-repair it… if you’re lucky.

Defensive System: That thing on her back. Aside from all her other capabilities, Andramica has a built-in defensive system. This was because her inventors were worried about theft and some people wanted to use her as a body-guard as well. And there were also those with weird fetishes like being raped by giant robotic monsters. This programming for those situations have become dominant within Andramica due to a bug which occurred upon being left alone, and she’ll treat every target as the type which desires this sort of play. Of course, her Hibernator can also qualify this, but in any case.

Besides the ability to stab and rip offenders into shreds, the defensive system has the ability to snatch and grab things close to the arms. The arms are much longer than they might appear first, and despite being only one stick each they are frightfully skilled at closing around things and people. Being a sexual android, Andramica’s “defensive system” can also be used for similar purposes, as each of those arms has the ability to shape the end of their arms to suitable forms. They also contain her aphrodisiac, her memory-fuzzing liquid and her fake cum to be released as desired. The main body of the defensive system takes with it Andramica’s core when separating in order to defend it, but otherwise the main body has no purpose but to seem really, really frightening. The metallic wires that composes the main body CAN be commanded to bind a victim or enter places instead of forming that monstrous defensive body, but doing so would mean the ten arms cannot be formed and used. Though, using it that way gives Andramica an almost unlimited amount of metal-wire tentacles emerging from the hatch in her back. How she uses her defensive system is entirely up to her.

Likes: As an android, Andramica has not been programmed to specifically “like” anything. But… she does seem to have a passion for abusing people, and she does seem to keep a special bond with her gigantic robot pet, the Hibernator.
Dislikes: Once again, Andramica has not been able to categorize anything as that she “dislikes” it due to something.

History: On a far-off world of monsters, there was a highly advanced species whose technology-level soared high compared to us. Their abilities were supernatural, their achievements many and their progress great. They had been able to traverse far beyond normal space and deconstructed the notion of a space limited to the speed of light. However… for all their accomplishments, they were also really, really perverse.

The Kragiyns found out about the planet where they, as monsters, were allowed to plunder girls as much as they wanted and positively make them theirs as long as they kept within a few limits. They were absolutely obsessed with the look of these… human girls which looked nothing like their own females. However, the proud (if perverse) Kragiyns thought themselves far superior than to need to hunt themselves, so they simply bought a single girl. One girl, not to be raped mercilessly or anything, but simply to serve as a model for their next top-hit for the Kragiyn market. Human androids. Of course, the model was raped multiple times anyway by the inventor crew, but that is merely details.

They were developing a sex-toy and a pet, someone to help in a Kragiynian daily life and help the population relieve their needs every once in a while. The development went well. Obedient human android females were soon mass-produced and sold to the public. The androids were highly popular, and Kragiyn never again bothered with the human school except for those who really desired a hunt after a real girl. A number of years later the species had exhausted all the materials on the planet they were on, and the entire race space-jumped out of the quadrant, never to be heard from again in that part of space for a good ten millennia. But… they left something behind.

Andramica was the prototype, the original production made from the single girl bought from Shokushu. She had been used by the original inventor, but he had been disposed of shortly before the space-jump. The confused android, left alone in the ruins… no… remains of a departed civilization was forced to reprogram herself with her limited programs in order to seek a master to pleasure. In a strange turn, the android set herself to be her master. And so she sat down and masturbated for many, many days, perhaps even years, for an android could never understand if it was overdoing it and it could never grow bored. It just sat there, masturbating for a near eternity, with nobody but emptiness as her audience. But in the end, she could never appreciate herself.

After a long, long while the android stopped believing it was fulfilling its purpose of pleasuring itself. Scanning her data-base she found a location closely related to the term “pleasure”. A school for humans, quite alike to her, was vividly displayed all over her information-net as an ultimate recluse for pleasure and perversity. Those were things Andramica was constructed to make herself feel, but she never could. As such the system within her decided that, in order to pleasure herself, she needed to go where this was possible. Hijacking a left-over space-ship and all the robots within it, including a certain monstrous being called the Hibernator, Andramica lifted her craft and left the surface of the planet with a course for Shokushu….

Ship/Vehicle: Her ship is a relic of a civilization that has moved away, and it did so along with the core which powered all its capabilities of space-jump. It carries no designation, its name forever left behind. This is but a scouting vessel, devoid of any overly outrageous weapons or potentially wicked features. The underside contains small energy-blasters, powered from the same core as the engine of the ship. It is capable of running through space at extraordinary speed, but in the end travel is also the only thing it was constructed for. And fleeing. In the background of this image, we can also see parts of the awesome civilization which once designed Andramica.

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Also, the ship is filled with strange spidery robots. They have no purpose except to act as the crew and keep maintenance of the ship. They come in different sizes, some being as tall as Andramica and others are small as mice in order to get in everywhere they are needed to. All have in common that each of them have a complete schematic of the ship stored inside their minds, each and every one of them has a great set of tools within them with which to work on the ship that they can use using those arms they can also stand on and each one of them follows their mistress’ every command. If they are on a ship they automatically follow their routine maintenance but if off a ship they will either simply seek their way back to their ship, follow their mistress other commands or stand helpless. Without a ship or commands they will be unable to fulfill their programming and stand around lifelessly, not even defending itself if attacked.

Each one of them bears that shape of a strange robotic spider thing with a giant eye on each side of the thing. It uses the arms below it to work. Their cores are stored in a small cylinder sticking out of their back. Oh, and since Andramica has become their mistress, she has outfitted each one with a dildo-accessory just in case. Though they are actually there to drive the ship and keep it intact. The circle above them is a holographic projection informing their status. Different colors mean different statuses.

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Miscellaneous: Andramica was programmed by those of her civilization, and only those are capable of programming her to do anything but what she’s doing right now. It need be noted, though, the instructions-manual is within her brain. So if one were to flip the submissive switch and bring it out while dominating her, it could be possible to reprogram her. IF one is able to do that, alien language and all, before Andramica comes to get her manual back, that is. The place for data is a small database on the back of her neck, only visible by sliding a hatch.

Mica: It could be noted that Andramica is based on a student that once went to Shokushu in some of the school's earlier years. Her name was Mica Sanders, a British girl who endured through her comparatively uneventful life in the school and emerged in the end of it relatively unscathed, although she was sold to the Kragiynians to be a slave forever. While Andramica differs from Mica in several ways in appearance, including some more stiff features, purely white skin where Mica's was normal white skin and red eyes where Mica's were brown, someone who has put Mica’s appearance in mind would potentially recognize Mica in Andramica. Not that there should be any students left to see the likeliness. However, older people or potentially monsters that have been around for long enough might potentially recognize the ghost of the girl who once walked these grounds. Andramica might use Mica’s forgotten history and information should she desire to come up with lies or excuses. However, the identity of Mica is mostly forgotten and many would be hard-pressed to remember such an insignificant girl. Though, the possibility exists.



Also, she has the following pet.

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Name: The Hibernator
Race: Machine
Type: Guard-monster
Place of Birth: Kragiyn
Gender: Negligible
Nationality: Kragiynian
Age: 150 years something
Height: 3,28 meters
Weight: 1500 kg
Eye Color: None.
Skin Color: Metallic black
Skin Texture: Steel

Body Build: A mechanic creature, standing on two bent legs holding up its humanoid-shaped giant bulk. But just because the limbs are positioned humanoid doesn’t mean it is. The arms become giant guns larger than humans, capable of killing as needed. On the metallic back, hunched forward in all the armor, four scythes stick out ready to assault any being that comes too close. Two clawed tentacles stick out of its back, shining in a brilliant yellow color. A large thick tail ending in a larger, closed claw hang behind it, it too shining yellow on the tips. In fact, yellow lines spread across the entire thing, into the limbs, into the scythes and into every part. This yellowness is what powers the monstrosity, and the cores are carried on top of the beast’s back in small and very solid containers kept on the outside because they’d overheat on the inside. And on the front of the top of the armor the teeth of the monstrosity on the eye-less head grin at all, small claws looking ready to devour roughly anything…

Tail: A long thick tail ending in a large mechanic head.
Tail Length: 3 meters tail, 6 inches head.
Tentacles: The Hibernator has two tentacles, each empowered with a steady flow of energy from the cores on its back. They have claws, capable of grabbing ahold of different things and doing what is needed of it.
Number of Tentacles: 2

Fighting Style: A pure combat machine, the Hibernator gets its name due to its purpose to stay in hibernation for an infinite amount of time until an intruder arrives which it can slaughter. Usually placed in pairs, Hibernators usually just wake up, pound their foe with so much firepower needed to destroy it and then go into hibernation again. The large amount of firepower contained within the guns is awesome, to say the least. Combined with a surprisingly athletic main body capable of rushing at great speeds, slice through things with ease using the scythes and dodge powerful blasts while delivering its own the Hibernator would normally be a terrifying foe. But… Andramica had no use of a killer robot, short for as a bodyguard. So… she reprogrammed it a bit. It now never kills unless its mistress is in danger.

Motivation: Driven only by his programming, the motivation of this beast is simply and only to fulfill its master’s wishes. Its master is currently Andramica the android. And it will follow her tiniest wink.
Psychological Profile: It cannot talk. It cannot think. All the Hibernator does is follow the commands of the tiny little master. Short from that, the Hibernator is nothing else than a monstrous beast of a machine that should never have been allowed out into the the free world.
Personality: None. It is a monster which protects its master, and follows her every order. Nothing more, nothing less.

Sexual Oddities: As a machine built purely for combat, the Hibernator never really had any sexual abilities. However, when paired with the sexual android Andramica the leader of the pair saw fit to customize his programming a bit. The tentacles, mouth and large tail have now been programmed in the arts of stimulating females as needed. Especially the tail, which now serves as the monster’s main cock. The android has made her giant servant work on his tail and claw to make them more easily acceptable for dripping genitals.

The core of the machine is built with a special hot liquid which now Andramica has customized after her own desires. The liquid is filled with energy, made to burn within the core of the Hibernator. It can now be spurted from the tentacles, tail or mouth of the monster. The warm yellow fluid is very slippery and can serve as excellent lubrication, and the energy and heat in it can transfer to a body it touches thereby increasing the liveliness and potentially the arousal of Andramica’s and the Hibernator’s victims. It can be spurted out at any time or at a later time to simulate the great machine coming. It holds no harmful effects to the female body, besides some caffeine-like side-effects that may last a little while.

Special Attributes: The giant powerful beast senses around itself using built-in scanners. These can be disrupted, but for that you need to know they are there. Andramica is capable of sending commands to the great machine through this one particular channel, simply by having herself send the commands to his scanner.

Distinguishing features: Size, armor covering the entire body and giant weapons capable of killing within moments. If those do not count, then I don’t know.

Behavior: It follows its mistress’ every wink and command, which means it often follows along to rape unsuspecting targets. Since it looks so dangerous, Andramica usually do not bring him forth until after the ruse is up or to surprise the victim. After that, they can team up on their victim, the android playing around with the upper body while the giant machine can indulge itself of the lower. That isn’t always, though. Andramica is a curious android, and experiments new things often. It isn’t always obvious what purpose the Hibernator will have in their next escapade…

Capabilities: The Hibernator has those giant guns for a reason. It can fire them for devastating effect. But lately, Andramica has avoided killing anything and the use of killing rounds has decreased. The uses of the guns can be switched by an easy command. Except for kill, the left gun also has the capability to shoot stun-charges at a rapid pace. It is to ensure targets cannot escape, as when their legs get hit the muscles will become momentarily paralyzed until the android has had her way. The right gun can switch to explosives, but that’s just silly in situations like this unless Andramica would want to get through a wall quickly.

Weaknesses: Being overly dependent on its mistress, it isn’t always that the Hibernator can detect something that the mistress missed. This means the big beast might be susceptible to surprise attacks, and it has its cores plainly visible on its back. Should they be destroyed, the robot will cease to move. However, destroying the cores is much more difficult than the transparent nature would suggest. Quite a bit of firepower would be needed to blow a hole through that material. Also, being seperated from his mistress might result in that the Hibernator becomes confused and immobile, unable to react to anything until the two of them refinds one another unless the Hibernator has specific orders to follow while seperated.

History: A standard Hibernator guard among a lot of others, this particular one was left behind when the civilization moved on, much like Andramica. It guarded one of the ships that was left behind. When Andramica went to collect a ship, the Hibernator woke and fired upon the intruder. Scanning her database for info, the android managed to outmaneuver the large machine and reprogram it upon coming closer. After having managed to do that, Andramica simply took it along and reprogrammed it during the trip. It has been her trusted side-kick ever since. Or body guard, if you think that fits better.

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... I got inspired. So I wrote this for a bit.

Question 1; Were you supposed to create a new account for a new character? It appears that some people have done so, others have not...

Question 2; .... Have I broken any rules?

Question 3; Is this profile gathering way too long?

Question 4; Am I correct in that she's a monster, or is she by some reason an SFA or something...?

Question 5; ... What do you guys think of my attempt?

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Andramica + Hibernator <--- Sex-obsessed android and pet.
Squanian <--- Squidian squid of Squidiness. And tentacles. And giant teethed mouths.
Mica Sanders <--- Alien Huntress with a bounty on her hea- body.
Samantha, Narelle, Mayra and Eliza <--- Four friends who came to Shokushu together.

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Thu Nov 22, 2012 1:06 am
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I must say I like them. The profile is very detailed and well-written. I especially like how you hint that Andramica might be a victim as well as a monster; something to explore in the Monster's hideout sometime, assuming she's approved.

Answers: (Mostly just my opinions, really, since I have no official standing with the site)

1) In the past, players have been encouraged to make separate accounts for separate characters, but it doesn't seem to be a rule per se. I, myself, have a mixture of multiple accounts and multiple profiles per account, largely separated by type (Monster/Space Monster/Student/Agent/etc.) So I think you'll be OK.

2) Can't really say for sure if you've broken any rules, but you might have a bit of a problem with how human Andramica looks in general. Disguise forms are meant to be temporary. But as I said, best to wait for a mod or admin to rule on such things.

3) In my opinion, profiles can't really be too long, as long as they don't become redundant. You have a bit of repetition in yours, but it still reads well to me, so I'd say its fine.

4) I'd say her motivation and likely behavior puts her strongly in the monster category. If she were more of a victim, she might squeak by as an SFA, but as she's written, especially with the Hibernator in tow, I'd say she's in the right place.

5) If it hasn't already been made abundantly clear, I think you've done an excellent job! =D>

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It's really up to you if you want to make multipule accounts.

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Vorgamnon: Thank you very much for your opinion. I treasure it, as I'm happy to hear it.

1; Hm, I'll consider if I want to create another one, then.
2; Seeing how Madison didn't shout at anything, I'll assume it is alright~
3; The repitition is mostly due to how the profile template looked. I mean... it had "Sexual Oddities", "Special Attributes", "Distinguishing Features" and "Capabilities" all in one row, which I think all is about what powers and such the monster possesses. So those were repeating themselves, I repeat myself. Thank you~
4; Thank you~ I thought right then~
5; And once again, thank you very much~! I'm rather proud of this profile myself. I'm happy you liked it~!

Madison: If I go by you said once, that what you don't mention is fine, I guess that means I'm approved?


Edit: I inserted a line about that Andramica can use her little bots that are capable of repairing her own tissues can also be sent to heal other people in case they are hurt. It isn't her intention to harm them, after all.

I also inserted a crew for her ship, since I had already mentioned that she took a bunch of robots for her own. They look like this.

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Well, I didn't mention much, because I wasn't exactly 100% there in terms of reasoning, as I had a couple of birthday drinks.

The main monster.... well... looks too human. She needs to appear less human before I can really approve it.

The other one is fine, if a bit violent.

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Ah. Never mind then. The main idea for her being a small but powerful little bait with a giant terror behind her falls is she needs to look like a monster herself. Also, her story doesn't fit if she was to look monstrous, there would be no point for any great civilization to make a sex-toy that doesn’t look nice. And she’d have no use of a monstrous shape if she’d simply be to look inviting. My idea was that the presence of the monster that was her pet would balance out her human appearance. But if that doesn’t work… then I’ll just abide by the rules.

I might perhaps update this if I get a new idea, though I doubt it.

I could scrap the huge thing and make her a unique SFA, but the idea of her being a hunter of young women would be impossible.

I’ll just leave this profile here like a dead relic never to be bothered with, then. I did enjoy writing it, after all, so I wasn’t entirely unrewarded.

... Heh. Cannot look too human... Hah... Then what is an android supposed to look like...? There appears to be no way to rape girls on the school while looking like one, despite completely machiney insides, super-strength that can tear things apart, a wide array of sexual and destructive equipment and a healthy obsession for rape... Hah-hah... SFA's are only allowed in space...

Added a note about inactivity of the profile on the top of it.

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Mica Sanders <--- Alien Huntress with a bounty on her hea- body.
Samantha, Narelle, Mayra and Eliza <--- Four friends who came to Shokushu together.

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One possibility is for her to be humanOID without looking -human-. ditching fake skin for something obviously synthetic, perhaps, or adding some more obviously extrusive mechanical bits? Obviously can't offer whether approvable or not, but certainly there's ways and means.

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[This post was the result of me posting the post below this one on the wrong account]

... So I might as well use it to thank kite-san for her suggestion which made me go seeking images of a suitable replacement. Thank you~

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Andramica + Hibernator <--- Sex-obsessed android and pet.
Squanian <--- Squidian squid of Squidiness. And tentacles. And giant teethed mouths.
Mica Sanders <--- Alien Huntress with a bounty on her hea- body.
Samantha, Narelle, Mayra and Eliza <--- Four friends who came to Shokushu together.

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Post Re: Andramica and the Hibernator, Trap Machines
I have retried. I searched for a suitably monstrous image, and found one. I added noticable uncanny valley traits to the android as well.

Most changes can be found by ctrl+f "defensive system", which I named the construction now on her back when in action.

I have created an additional account for this character which I am now using to make this post.

I await a second evaluation.

Actually, I only await a confirmation if she still is too human or if I can play like this.

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Oh my goodness, what a profile. Fun for both monsters and students, I really like the touch of the submission switch and the history was really interesting. Anyway thanks for the awesome read! :)

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I concur! Brilliant read and profile! Hope you have fun with her! :D

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I am happy that you both enjoyed my writing. I do hope to have fun with her in the future, if I am allowed to proceed.

In the very bottom of Andramica's profile I added a few lines about the girl that she's based on. It isn't much, and it certainly isn't her life's story. However, it does raise some points about that she acually could be recognized by someone who has stayed on the school long enough. I am somewhat unsure of how long exactly the school has existed, but I have decided that the girl Andramica was based on went to Shokushu in some of the school's earlier days, if that is allowed.

That's about that.

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I don't see any problems with the current iteration of Andramica, as it is not only a very thorough profile but also sufficiently inhuman at the present moment. Someone as white as drywall emanating light from their eyes doesn't quite fit in with normal schoolgirl's, I'd say. I would imagine that her personality, being a complete simulation rather than an effect of organic motives, would seem off-putting as well.

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Post Re: Andramica and the Hibernator, Trap Machines
Thank you very much, Niellwyn.

Now to think of how a simulated personality might differ from an organic one. Hm. It will hopefully come naturally when I roleplay, considering I know my programmed motives. Heh-heh-heh...

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Just act how you imagine somebody would act who has perfect awareness of their irrational, arbitrary impulses and attaches no existential meaning to them whatsoever. Like a sentient insect, or someone who smiles whenever they hear the word 'peanut' because they were trained to. Like, your android would exhibit all the basic, obvious gestures and mannerisms but would lack all the little attending ones. And who doesn't share the culture prerogatives of anybody around her.

Just my interpretation of what you described. *embarrassed* I quite like this character. I have a fascination with artificial persons.

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